Senquetta Brittingham
Writing workshop
Prof. George Make a difference
February 10, 2014
Today, 54 million people
in the United States are living in the community with a disability. That’s one
in every five people. According to the most recent census data, around 52
million of them reside in the community. According to (http://www.hhs.gov/od/about/fact_sheets/whatisdisability.html)
. These disabilities may include sensory, physical, mental, self-care,
difficulty going out, and employment disability. These things can be very
expensive.
Supplies is something
that is very crucial for people disabilities. They may need adaptive equipment
such as wheel chairs hoya lifts, cairns. As well many other things. These things
can become very expensive for families.
Visionary voices is a
organization founded by Temple University. This website advocates equal rights
and education for people with disabilities. It ensures safety for people with
disabilities. This organization plans to bring awareness to audiences about
people who suffer from disabilities. This site is also very useful for the
public because personally I didn’t know much about people with disabilities. I
knew that they may have difficult navigating around or learning depending on the
disability that one may have. Personally I didn’t know how expensive these
things may be. After research I discovered how costly things can get. Which
then increased my curiosity on ways that can be helpful financial. That’s why I
feel a benefits tab can be the most effective. This website should include a
benefits tab because it could pose for a resource for people with disabilities
to financially pay for medication or equipment that they may need. A benefits
tab will allow viewers to contribute toward a way where they could truly help.
When people are drawn to cause the usually want to help.
With having a benefits tab any contribution will be appreciated. I also feel
like the families will feel supported in this cause to see that every need is
met. Making this tab on the visionary voices website will bring more awareness
to the cause; which could ultimately earn more money for people.
After all I learned using the internet I realized how big
a message can spread through a website. Everyone has access to the internet so it’s
easier to obtain more awareness from the public. With all of my knowledge from
personally experience with the internet. I learned that people tend to retain
information better when it isn’t forced upon them.
In researching
technology, I learned that it makes things easier and more convenient to access
information. The use of technology is especially good for individuals with
disabilities because they may not be able to get to a library. With modern day
technology people have constant contact with the internet. When I first went on
the visionary voices website nothing initially grabbed my attention. I felt the
website should include more videos or interviews of some of the children with
disabilities. I also felt that there needed to be more resources. I know with financial
adversities people with disabilities aren’t always supplied with the things
that they need. The benefits tab could be a place where viewers could help by
giving money to the program. Possibly getting some government assistance would
help bring in more revenue. This could be life changing for a person with disabilities.
Often times people tend to not always have support. People may come from
families where they simply don’t have the resources that one would need in
order to handle all of the extensive expenses. This benefits tab could change a
life. I think that this is a bigger way to ensure that their financial troubles
regarding their needs for supplies will be ensured. I strongly feel that could
be a much larger impactful thing visionary voices should include on their
website.
A benefits tab will be
most useful for the visionary voices website. This tab will be the mostly be
useful for the website. Because once people realize the financial struggles
have they will want to help. As I reflect back to my prior knowledge about
people with disabilities. I know my interpretations were invalid. With
technology today it’s much easier to research a topic through the internet. So,
people with disabilities have a lot of easier access to technology so I believe
many will be educated about the benefits tab.
In conclusion Visionary
voices should include a benefits tab to help people with disabilities to pay
for their supplies
http://www.hhs.gov/od/about/fact_sheets/whatisdisability.html
I see you defining the problem as something like: people with disabilities need resources and services and the website doesn't offer any. I see your proposed solution as something like: the website should have a benefits tab which would primarily include financial resources. I also see you using outside research to establish your claim that having a disability can require costly supports. I'm still confused about how your problem/solution relates to the purpose of the Visionary Voices project.
ReplyDeletePossible revisions: be willing to change the focus of the problem/solution so that it clearly supports the purpose of the website; provide a detailed description of the new feature so that we can see exactly how you imagine it, and how it addresses the problem; for each paragraph, try working from a general statement to more specific evidence that supports or further describes the statement; be willing to make cuts to make room for new ideas; help the reader follow your argument by using guideposts, transitions, and summaries.